Shadow Knight

Green = Suggested Correction , oh how he rembered remembered and sent him spawling sprawling onto his back Silly mistakes! Seriously, the best things you can do before you post ...

*Jaw goes slack, mumbles something incoherent* That was incredible, I must say. The descriptions, the plot, just... overall wow.

Heh heh... Brilliant... last part is a little rushed though. I didn't notice any grammatical errors, but then again, I wasn't looking! I was focusing too much on the story ...

Well... if you're telling us to wait, WRITE THEM. :P Lol, you hard core gamer you.

7/10. It could be better. Can't really find any grammatical errors, which is the only thing i'd be able to help you with so... someone else help this guy! lol.

Poetry was never my forté either... but i'll be damned if this isn't good. I can't find anything grammatically wrong with this either...

I was taught otherwise, but i'll look it up...

Many thankus Jackimus.

I know... but i'm certain it is 'It's' for ownership too...

Yes, but Word is always wrong... My grammar is better than Word's on most instances, what does that tell you?

Lmao... It's funny, and true... :P

Sorry if I said anything to offend you Slothman/Shadow Knight. Meh, I don't know about Sloth, but i'm not offended.

OK. Well maybe it should have said that the country had once been beautiful but after the war things changed and maybe it didn't appear beautiful to foreigners. No, because ...

Wow, for your first time writing, that was bloody brilliant! I'm not really going to say more, on account of me being half asleep, but good job!

Interesting, not bad. It confused me a little, but it's good, I lost track of who was who in some parts, but other than that it's fine.